Kieran's legal name has been changed to "None" in chapter 5 lmao, I just know Catherine was behind it. Btw erm will there be an atlas redemption in the future or is the bridge so burned it is in hell?
Hello. Do you actually want to know? I can tell you the entire storyline if you want me to, so you don't have any surprises anymore :P Or would you prefer reading the novel?
Hello. All public builds are currently on hiatus until further notice. Progress can be followed on our Ko-Fi page or Patreon. Thanks for reading so far 🐯
I loved reading the story, a different theme that I really like, one that I look forward to releasing with great pleasure. Sad that I can't pay patreon, I would love to help with some money, you guys deserve all the support.
Hello. No idea. Between working a full-time job and paying the coder and artist for each chapter, I don't have that much free time and funds to fully develop a story and give it out as soon as possible. Have fun reading other FVNs in the meanwhile :)
acabo de terminar de leerlo y ame la historia, uno de las cosas que más me gusto fue la musica y el como estan hechos los personajes, no soy una persona que logre ver los aspectos tecnicos de la historia, pero definitivamente me gusto, desafortunadamente soy más pobre trabajador de mc donalds y no puedo pagar el patreon ;-;
There is no explicit sexual content if that's what you're asking. As for SFW, well, there are horror themes involved but there is no gore involved either.
Como me gustaría comprar algo en la tienda, por desgracia no tengo los recursos, intentaré donar algo a través del Patreon pero Dios que gran obra de arte, simplemente exlente
Thank you so much for the kind words! We will do our best to continue to offer the same level of entertainment 😊 Please support our novel by becoming a patreon and/or sharing it with your friends or on social media 🦊
Well, I've used my poor knowledge of English to finish the novel for the time being. Overall, it was amazing (five stars！), and（for story next） personally I'm looking forward to seeing how the plot improves on its subsequent setting (because it's very fresh to me!). As well as the setup of the main line conflict (and the constant run-in with the characters), so far this part of the update is great!Just keep your wonderful creation! Sincerely wish your works can continue to be productive!
So I've just begun this vn and at the start I saw Romanian as a language option?? If y'all need an extra translator hmuuu (and side note really excited to experience the vn, only heard good things ab it :))
I overlooked this when I saw it a few months ago but I'm glad I came back and took time to read it. 👍 A few spots here and there that seem a bit rushed I'd say it was a great read, keep it up!
so it was right before they cuddle in bed I guess a couple weeks went by where they didn't really interact at all, it felt a bit fast for them to suddenly just sleep in the same bed. I wish they had some sort of interaction prior during the day Maybe they finally got a chance to hang out again ya know?
I kind of felt the same way when he got with atlas they apparently never interact much anymore to just suddenly hooking up. Some build up like them interacting and hanging out again prior for a few days with a little tension would be nice.
You said it's not a romance novel but two instances of romance that seem to add major plot points to the story have happened and they felt a bit sudden or rushed leading up to the instances.
But fr it's not really a big deal and I still love what you have so far :)
Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I do see you have a preference for, perhaps, a slow-burn style where things are prepared in advance, there is some build-up and then there is release. But things don't always happen like that in real-life scenarios or even fictional ones. Sometimes there is no hanging out, talking about nothing in particular, and ending up together be it sexually or otherwise.
What you are describing are beats from romantic dating sims or plots, which are great genres in themselves, but also somewhat predictive and a tad slow. It could be that you are applying the same story structure those genres have to this novel. It's not a bad thing. In fact, it goes to show that you gave some thought to how the story is advancing and that means it got you immersed in it to care enough to write a comment :)
**spoiler alert for the following paragraph**
If you re-read the part, for example, where Lucian and Atlas meet up again after their hook-up, we find out why both of them did what they did because they talk about it. Their actions were normal based on the situation and nothing was rushed in terms of the "why". As for Darius, he also explains his reasons and Lucian gives in because he wants to be a good friend. All of their reactions are based on their unique circumstances, not necessarily on a predetermined narrative structure.
Consider reading this story with a different structure in mind, or better yet, try to let yourself be surprised by what can happen. Many more pleasurable and unique moments can arise from chaotic, rushed, and sudden turn of events than from the slow and often predictable ones.
Looking forward to your thoughts on Chapter 4. Let's see if it captivates you just as much as the previous ones!
Hello. If you mean if we are going to finish it, then yes. The story is 80% already written and the last 20% has been outlined and plotted out. There are already several chapters fully edited for production as well, we just need the visual and audio assets to finish up each build. We aim to publish one build per month. Hope you enjoy our kinetic novel. We worked really hard on it :) Have fun reading!
Really interesting premise! The “light” is such an intriguing power. Excited to see future builds ^v^ take care and dont feel the need to rush them out
Hello! I hope you are doing well :) Ever since the update for chapter 2 my game crashes as soon as i open it :\ Im on mac and it was working great for the first chapter. I uninstalled and redownloaded but still the same issue
Omg Atlas is Leo all over again isn't he? why must I fall for every mentally unstable man!? I wanna swear I can fix him.. but I ain't got that Bob the builder in me.
I do wish there was a way to be more honest about the game without spoiling things. Personally i'm not too big on dating sims, but a nice husbando on the screen does wonders for my attention span.. So just having a romance subplot with that hunk is a huge plus. Still interested in the game, tho i'll feel a bit bad if the mc doesn't get back with him.
I have to note the itch page still lags like hell and while on my PC i barely notice, it does heat up the gpu..
Thanks for pointing out the lag. Could you come to our discord server and talk to Tito about it? He would probably want to know more so he can figure out what to fix on it.
As for the novel. It has a romantic subplot. The main theme is thriller though. I just didn't bruteforce the story line immediately with nerve-wracking suspense. I think people should ease into a story and feel taken away by it, not spoon-fed all the details from the get go, thus leaving no room for imagination, surprise and intrigue.
Thank you for reading so far! I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters as well 😊
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Kieran's legal name has been changed to "None" in chapter 5 lmao, I just know Catherine was behind it. Btw erm will there be an atlas redemption in the future or is the bridge so burned it is in hell?
Hello. Do you actually want to know? I can tell you the entire storyline if you want me to, so you don't have any surprises anymore :P Or would you prefer reading the novel?
Wanna more nsfw content! And i like the lion.
Hello. There will be no NSFW content in this visual novel in the form of pornography. Thanks for reading so far :)
Nevermind!The story itself is good enough.I am still desirable for the updates.
hi im trying to select the romanian language but it doesnt work, can someone help?
Hi there. Romanian is only available in the demo on the website. The downloadable version doesn't have it.
When is chapter 5 going to be public available
Hello. All public builds are currently on hiatus until further notice. Progress can be followed on our Ko-Fi page or Patreon. Thanks for reading so far 🐯
oh ok i'll wait then and nice visual novel you created.
I loved reading the story, a different theme that I really like, one that I look forward to releasing with great pleasure. Sad that I can't pay patreon, I would love to help with some money, you guys deserve all the support.
Thank you :)
hello when would you give us the whole story bud?
Hello. No idea. Between working a full-time job and paying the coder and artist for each chapter, I don't have that much free time and funds to fully develop a story and give it out as soon as possible. Have fun reading other FVNs in the meanwhile :)
When is the public update coming out? If it will be a while, I'll watch the new update on patreon.
The public update will only come out when chapter 6 is ready.
acabo de terminar de leerlo y ame la historia, uno de las cosas que más me gusto fue la musica y el como estan hechos los personajes, no soy una persona que logre ver los aspectos tecnicos de la historia, pero definitivamente me gusto, desafortunadamente soy más pobre trabajador de mc donalds y no puedo pagar el patreon ;-;
Thank you for reading ☺️
the pleasure is mine. I really enjoy the vn ^-^
is this sfw?
There is no explicit sexual content if that's what you're asking. As for SFW, well, there are horror themes involved but there is no gore involved either.
thank you
No se si paso un año, pero el tiempo que paso, tu novela visual apareció en varios canales de YouTubers, creame es real, !!!! sigue asi¡¡¡¡😊😊😊😊😊😊🤩🤩
Thank you ☺️
I'm absolutely in love, you've done a great job so far, can't wait for public build 5
Thanks for reading 😊
Is their any erotic scenes?
Hello. Absolutely zero. This novel is rated 16+.
This person asked about "erotic" and not "nsfw/sex" scenes, sooo technically there is some content like that.
DIOOOOOOOOOOOOOSS, QUE INTENSO, pero me gusto la recomiendo totalmente.
Thank you 😊
Como me gustaría comprar algo en la tienda, por desgracia no tengo los recursos, intentaré donar algo a través del Patreon pero Dios que gran obra de arte, simplemente exlente
Thank you for the kind words 😊
There won't be a happy ending, would there? I'm watching everything Lucian is going through and I'm like T∆T
Read on to find out 🙂
if i could rate this vn 1000/10 i would do it many times cause this vn is masterpiece
Thank you for the kind words! Please don't forget to give it 5* if you enjoyed it. It definitely helps us grow 😊
I cried when hugged a zebra. i love his smile
Thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked James 😊🦓
Thank you so much for the kind words! We will do our best to continue to offer the same level of entertainment 😊 Please support our novel by becoming a patreon and/or sharing it with your friends or on social media 🦊
Well, I've used my poor knowledge of English to finish the novel for the time being. Overall, it was amazing (five stars！), and（for story next） personally I'm looking forward to seeing how the plot improves on its subsequent setting (because it's very fresh to me!). As well as the setup of the main line conflict (and the constant run-in with the characters), so far this part of the update is great!Just keep your wonderful creation! Sincerely wish your works can continue to be productive!
Thank you for the kind words :) What is your main language?
Chinese( ´ ▽ ` )ﾉ
That update will come today or tomorrow for all chapters 👍
This team really should be proud of their work! Five of Five stars!
Thank you so much 😊 Please share our novel so we can grow bigger! I hope you enjoyed Chapter 4!
Can do! and yes I did enjoy it, looking forward to reading more!
So I've just begun this vn and at the start I saw Romanian as a language option??
If y'all need an extra translator hmuuu
(and side note really excited to experience the vn, only heard good things ab it :))
Hello. Please join the discord server and message me 👍😊
alright!! But uh, message who in particular
I like the muscular tiger and especially the chubby lion. Do you plan on having height and weight info of the main characters soon?
Hello. Maybe at some point in the future, we will create some ref sheets, but not any time soon. I'm glad you liked Atlas and Darius :)
amazing story and translate for cn, great great great game!
Thank you 😊
I love this the story is amazing and the visuals are also amazing keep up the amazing work I can't wait for the 4th chapter.
Thank you 😊
omg, you have chinese! readed chapter 1, i love this game
I'm glad you liked it 😊
Thank you for reading 😊
ur welcom it was fun to read and i loved the art style
I overlooked this when I saw it a few months ago but I'm glad I came back and took time to read it. 👍 A few spots here and there that seem a bit rushed I'd say it was a great read, keep it up!
Thank you 😊 Which parts felt rushed to you?
I reread the part I was thinking of.
so it was right before they cuddle in bed I guess a couple weeks went by where they didn't really interact at all, it felt a bit fast for them to suddenly just sleep in the same bed. I wish they had some sort of interaction prior during the day Maybe they finally got a chance to hang out again ya know?
I kind of felt the same way when he got with atlas they apparently never interact much anymore to just suddenly hooking up. Some build up like them interacting and hanging out again prior for a few days with a little tension would be nice.
You said it's not a romance novel but two instances of romance that seem to add major plot points to the story have happened and they felt a bit sudden or rushed leading up to the instances.
But fr it's not really a big deal and I still love what you have so far :)
Hi again!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I do see you have a preference for, perhaps, a slow-burn style where things are prepared in advance, there is some build-up and then there is release. But things don't always happen like that in real-life scenarios or even fictional ones. Sometimes there is no hanging out, talking about nothing in particular, and ending up together be it sexually or otherwise.
What you are describing are beats from romantic dating sims or plots, which are great genres in themselves, but also somewhat predictive and a tad slow. It could be that you are applying the same story structure those genres have to this novel. It's not a bad thing. In fact, it goes to show that you gave some thought to how the story is advancing and that means it got you immersed in it to care enough to write a comment :)
**spoiler alert for the following paragraph**
If you re-read the part, for example, where Lucian and Atlas meet up again after their hook-up, we find out why both of them did what they did because they talk about it. Their actions were normal based on the situation and nothing was rushed in terms of the "why". As for Darius, he also explains his reasons and Lucian gives in because he wants to be a good friend. All of their reactions are based on their unique circumstances, not necessarily on a predetermined narrative structure.
Consider reading this story with a different structure in mind, or better yet, try to let yourself be surprised by what can happen. Many more pleasurable and unique moments can arise from chaotic, rushed, and sudden turn of events than from the slow and often predictable ones.
Looking forward to your thoughts on Chapter 4. Let's see if it captivates you just as much as the previous ones!
- H.M.
Hmmm, nah just some more small interactions or a little more story prior in a few instances, regardless I love the visual novel.
Your amazing Bat studios I hope You and I become great friends
:)
Will this VN have routes for each love intrest?
Hello. No. This is not a romantic dating sim. It's a linear kinetic novel 😊
Are you looking for proofreaders at the moment?
Hello. Not at the moment, but thank you for reaching out 👍
Before I play this does this to be continued
Hello. If you mean if we are going to finish it, then yes. The story is 80% already written and the last 20% has been outlined and plotted out. There are already several chapters fully edited for production as well, we just need the visual and audio assets to finish up each build. We aim to publish one build per month. Hope you enjoy our kinetic novel. We worked really hard on it :) Have fun reading!
I wasn't trying sound rude sorry
I didn’t think you were rude 😊
OMG, I freaked out when the default name was Lucian because that is my name!!!
A happy coincidence? 😊
Yup, I love the story thus far, can't wait for future posts!
When will chapter 3 be public?
About 3 weeks 👍
It's a pity that I haven't seen the old sprites.So can you upload the last version?Thank you very much.
Hello. Sorry, but we won't upload the version with the old artwork anymore. I hope you liked the story so far :)
It's okay. A friend of mine sent me a previous version of the game. And I really like this story.I hope your game will become better and better.
Thank you 😊
its cool to have like a 5th vn that's sfw
Thanks for reading! :)
Really interesting premise! The “light” is such an intriguing power. Excited to see future builds ^v^ take care and dont feel the need to rush them out
Thanks for reading! We'll keep things going slowly but surely 🙂
Hello! I hope you are doing well :)
Ever since the update for chapter 2 my game crashes as soon as i open it :\
Im on mac and it was working great for the first chapter. I uninstalled and redownloaded but still the same issue
Are you using 0.2.6a? If so, can you come to the discord and message #feeback-bugs in detail?
Omg Atlas is Leo all over again isn't he? why must I fall for every mentally unstable man!? I wanna swear I can fix him.. but I ain't got that Bob the builder in me.
Very different characters. Very. Glad you enjoyed the chapters :) Next one should be out for Patreons at the end of September hopefully.
Thank God. I actually like Atlas, but he does look like an asshole rn. Hope he gets a chance to redeem himself.
At this point, is every chapter going to end with Lucian being in an uncomfortable situation with someone he has an interest in?
(I loved the chapter, looking forward to the next chapters)
Uncomfortable, maybe. But...I need to mention something. This is not a romance novel ☺️
I do wish there was a way to be more honest about the game without spoiling things. Personally i'm not too big on dating sims, but a nice husbando on the screen does wonders for my attention span.. So just having a romance subplot with that hunk is a huge plus. Still interested in the game, tho i'll feel a bit bad if the mc doesn't get back with him.
I have to note the itch page still lags like hell and while on my PC i barely notice, it does heat up the gpu..
Thanks for pointing out the lag. Could you come to our discord server and talk to Tito about it? He would probably want to know more so he can figure out what to fix on it.
As for the novel. It has a romantic subplot. The main theme is thriller though. I just didn't bruteforce the story line immediately with nerve-wracking suspense. I think people should ease into a story and feel taken away by it, not spoon-fed all the details from the get go, thus leaving no room for imagination, surprise and intrigue.
Thank you for reading so far! I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters as well 😊
Just did chapter 1. My feelings! take those back!
Glad you liked it! There's more to come 😊