I overlooked this when I saw it a few months ago but I'm glad I came back and took time to read it. 👍 A few spots here and there that seem a bit rushed I'd say it was a great read, keep it up!
so it was right before they cuddle in bed I guess a couple weeks went by where they didn't really interact at all, it felt a bit fast for them to suddenly just sleep in the same bed. I wish they had some sort of interaction prior during the day Maybe they finally got a chance to hang out again ya know?
I kind of felt the same way when he got with atlas they apparently never interact much anymore to just suddenly hooking up. Some build up like them interacting and hanging out again prior for a few days with a little tension would be nice.
You said it's not a romance novel but two instances of romance that seem to add major plot points to the story have happened and they felt a bit sudden or rushed leading up to the instances.
But fr it's not really a big deal and I still love what you have so far :)
Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I do see you have a preference for, perhaps, a slow-burn style where things are prepared in advance, there is some build-up and then there is release. But things don't always happen like that in real-life scenarios or even fictional ones. Sometimes there is no hanging out, talking about nothing in particular, and ending up together be it sexually or otherwise.
What you are describing are beats from romantic dating sims or plots, which are great genres in themselves, but also somewhat predictive and a tad slow. It could be that you are applying the same story structure those genres have to this novel. It's not a bad thing. In fact, it goes to show that you gave some thought to how the story is advancing and that means it got you immersed in it to care enough to write a comment :)
**spoiler alert for the following paragraph**
If you re-read the part, for example, where Lucian and Atlas meet up again after their hook-up, we find out why both of them did what they did because they talk about it. Their actions were normal based on the situation and nothing was rushed in terms of the "why". As for Darius, he also explains his reasons and Lucian gives in because he wants to be a good friend. All of their reactions are based on their unique circumstances, not necessarily on a predetermined narrative structure.
Consider reading this story with a different structure in mind, or better yet, try to let yourself be surprised by what can happen. Many more pleasurable and unique moments can arise from chaotic, rushed, and sudden turn of events than from the slow and often predictable ones.
Looking forward to your thoughts on Chapter 4. Let's see if it captivates you just as much as the previous ones!
Hello. If you mean if we are going to finish it, then yes. The story is 80% already written and the last 20% has been outlined and plotted out. There are already several chapters fully edited for production as well, we just need the visual and audio assets to finish up each build. We aim to publish one build per month. Hope you enjoy our kinetic novel. We worked really hard on it :) Have fun reading!
Really interesting premise! The “light” is such an intriguing power. Excited to see future builds ^v^ take care and dont feel the need to rush them out
Hello! I hope you are doing well :) Ever since the update for chapter 2 my game crashes as soon as i open it :\ Im on mac and it was working great for the first chapter. I uninstalled and redownloaded but still the same issue
Omg Atlas is Leo all over again isn't he? why must I fall for every mentally unstable man!? I wanna swear I can fix him.. but I ain't got that Bob the builder in me.
I do wish there was a way to be more honest about the game without spoiling things. Personally i'm not too big on dating sims, but a nice husbando on the screen does wonders for my attention span.. So just having a romance subplot with that hunk is a huge plus. Still interested in the game, tho i'll feel a bit bad if the mc doesn't get back with him.
I have to note the itch page still lags like hell and while on my PC i barely notice, it does heat up the gpu..
Thanks for pointing out the lag. Could you come to our discord server and talk to Tito about it? He would probably want to know more so he can figure out what to fix on it.
As for the novel. It has a romantic subplot. The main theme is thriller though. I just didn't bruteforce the story line immediately with nerve-wracking suspense. I think people should ease into a story and feel taken away by it, not spoon-fed all the details from the get go, thus leaving no room for imagination, surprise and intrigue.
Thank you for reading so far! I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters as well 😊
seeing as no one else has asked the question, i figured id get it out of the way and ask first. Not that i'm looking for that kind of thing, but does this vn have or will it have NSFW content?
Hello. This Kinetic Novel will not have NSFW content. It is intended for everyone so it's on the side of SFW with a major focus on the story. Thanks for reading so far :)
One of the best intros of the many visual novels out there, I got hooked right into the end. I am loving the story so much, the art is TOP NOTCH!! The animation makes the illustrations lively, the attention to detail in the CG's are beautiful and meaningful, especially in that part where Atlas and the MC got into an argument. Everything about this game is just great!! I CAN'T wait for more. Please keep up the amazing work!! And thank you for your hard works!
Incredible start! UwU good writing, fun characters, and a very, VERY intriguing story concept~ :) tell me, by any chance, were xou inspired by psychic vampyres?
It was unexpected for a demo to be able to evoke such a range of emotions in me already. Reading that blew me away. I'm glad there's more to come because I really need to see what the future holds for Lucian.
I notice there is no romance tag, is there any plan for that in the later story? I have some hopes for what might happen with certain characters, but can also see a potentially different outcome.
Thank you for reading the first chapter. I would prefer not to divulge anything and let the story speak for itself 😊 We plan on releasing a chapter every 1st of each month so stay tuned for more!
I have no idea where the "light" plot is going for but it's interesting enough to follow. Atlas is really cute too and definitely not the main motivation nope.
After playing it, I really liked it. It was the beginning and the end of the chapter that I felt was good and many emotions were very impressive. Keep fighting and I'll be looking forward to the next update.
Version 0.6 is a fine production, but you should be aware that it drops into a loop after - I think - the encounter with Atlas. The loop encompasses the training session wit the Zebra and drops back to Atlas.
Hi there. We are aware of the issue and I believe Tito fixed it with the update. But I'll make sure to pass it on to him that some might still experience the bug. Thanks for letting us know! :)
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Thank you for reading 😊
ur welcom it was fun to read and i loved the art style
I overlooked this when I saw it a few months ago but I'm glad I came back and took time to read it. 👍 A few spots here and there that seem a bit rushed I'd say it was a great read, keep it up!
Thank you 😊 Which parts felt rushed to you?
I reread the part I was thinking of.
so it was right before they cuddle in bed I guess a couple weeks went by where they didn't really interact at all, it felt a bit fast for them to suddenly just sleep in the same bed. I wish they had some sort of interaction prior during the day Maybe they finally got a chance to hang out again ya know?
I kind of felt the same way when he got with atlas they apparently never interact much anymore to just suddenly hooking up. Some build up like them interacting and hanging out again prior for a few days with a little tension would be nice.
You said it's not a romance novel but two instances of romance that seem to add major plot points to the story have happened and they felt a bit sudden or rushed leading up to the instances.
But fr it's not really a big deal and I still love what you have so far :)
Hi again!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I do see you have a preference for, perhaps, a slow-burn style where things are prepared in advance, there is some build-up and then there is release. But things don't always happen like that in real-life scenarios or even fictional ones. Sometimes there is no hanging out, talking about nothing in particular, and ending up together be it sexually or otherwise.
What you are describing are beats from romantic dating sims or plots, which are great genres in themselves, but also somewhat predictive and a tad slow. It could be that you are applying the same story structure those genres have to this novel. It's not a bad thing. In fact, it goes to show that you gave some thought to how the story is advancing and that means it got you immersed in it to care enough to write a comment :)
**spoiler alert for the following paragraph**
If you re-read the part, for example, where Lucian and Atlas meet up again after their hook-up, we find out why both of them did what they did because they talk about it. Their actions were normal based on the situation and nothing was rushed in terms of the "why". As for Darius, he also explains his reasons and Lucian gives in because he wants to be a good friend. All of their reactions are based on their unique circumstances, not necessarily on a predetermined narrative structure.
Consider reading this story with a different structure in mind, or better yet, try to let yourself be surprised by what can happen. Many more pleasurable and unique moments can arise from chaotic, rushed, and sudden turn of events than from the slow and often predictable ones.
Looking forward to your thoughts on Chapter 4. Let's see if it captivates you just as much as the previous ones!
- H.M.
Hmmm, nah just some more small interactions or a little more story prior in a few instances, regardless I love the visual novel.
Your amazing Bat studios I hope You and I become great friends
:)
Will this VN have routes for each love intrest?
Hello. No. This is not a romantic dating sim. It's a linear kinetic novel 😊
Are you looking for proofreaders at the moment?
Hello. Not at the moment, but thank you for reaching out 👍
Before I play this does this to be continued
Hello. If you mean if we are going to finish it, then yes. The story is 80% already written and the last 20% has been outlined and plotted out. There are already several chapters fully edited for production as well, we just need the visual and audio assets to finish up each build. We aim to publish one build per month. Hope you enjoy our kinetic novel. We worked really hard on it :) Have fun reading!
I wasn't trying sound rude sorry
I didn’t think you were rude 😊
OMG, I freaked out when the default name was Lucian because that is my name!!!
A happy coincidence? 😊
Yup, I love the story thus far, can't wait for future posts!
When will chapter 3 be public?
About 3 weeks 👍
It's a pity that I haven't seen the old sprites.So can you upload the last version?Thank you very much.
Hello. Sorry, but we won't upload the version with the old artwork anymore. I hope you liked the story so far :)
It's okay. A friend of mine sent me a previous version of the game. And I really like this story.I hope your game will become better and better.
Thank you 😊
its cool to have like a 5th vn that's sfw
Thanks for reading! :)
Really interesting premise! The “light” is such an intriguing power. Excited to see future builds ^v^ take care and dont feel the need to rush them out
Thanks for reading! We'll keep things going slowly but surely 🙂
Hello! I hope you are doing well :)
Ever since the update for chapter 2 my game crashes as soon as i open it :\
Im on mac and it was working great for the first chapter. I uninstalled and redownloaded but still the same issue
Are you using 0.2.6a? If so, can you come to the discord and message #feeback-bugs in detail?
Omg Atlas is Leo all over again isn't he? why must I fall for every mentally unstable man!? I wanna swear I can fix him.. but I ain't got that Bob the builder in me.
Very different characters. Very. Glad you enjoyed the chapters :) Next one should be out for Patreons at the end of September hopefully.
Thank God. I actually like Atlas, but he does look like an asshole rn. Hope he gets a chance to redeem himself.
At this point, is every chapter going to end with Lucian being in an uncomfortable situation with someone he has an interest in?
(I loved the chapter, looking forward to the next chapters)
Uncomfortable, maybe. But...I need to mention something. This is not a romance novel ☺️
I do wish there was a way to be more honest about the game without spoiling things. Personally i'm not too big on dating sims, but a nice husbando on the screen does wonders for my attention span.. So just having a romance subplot with that hunk is a huge plus. Still interested in the game, tho i'll feel a bit bad if the mc doesn't get back with him.
I have to note the itch page still lags like hell and while on my PC i barely notice, it does heat up the gpu..
Thanks for pointing out the lag. Could you come to our discord server and talk to Tito about it? He would probably want to know more so he can figure out what to fix on it.
As for the novel. It has a romantic subplot. The main theme is thriller though. I just didn't bruteforce the story line immediately with nerve-wracking suspense. I think people should ease into a story and feel taken away by it, not spoon-fed all the details from the get go, thus leaving no room for imagination, surprise and intrigue.
Thank you for reading so far! I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters as well 😊
Just did chapter 1. My feelings! take those back!
Glad you liked it! There's more to come 😊
i just downloaded this and omg the story is really good
Thank you for reading! 😊
hi? discord link seems expired
Hello. Please try this link: https://discord.gg/nETcWXyw7J. I also updated it on the game page. It should work now.
seeing as no one else has asked the question, i figured id get it out of the way and ask first. Not that i'm looking for that kind of thing, but does this vn have or will it have NSFW content?
Hello. This Kinetic Novel will not have NSFW content. It is intended for everyone so it's on the side of SFW with a major focus on the story. Thanks for reading so far :)
It does have a sex scene though, tastefully done (SFW) with the emphasis being on the emotional and story aspect of the event.
I love the stories with emotional connections and romance. So far it seems like this VN will not be lacking in that, even though it is SFW.
One of the best intros of the many visual novels out there, I got hooked right into the end. I am loving the story so much, the art is TOP NOTCH!! The animation makes the illustrations lively, the attention to detail in the CG's are beautiful and meaningful, especially in that part where Atlas and the MC got into an argument. Everything about this game is just great!! I CAN'T wait for more. Please keep up the amazing work!! And thank you for your hard works!
Thank you for reading! The next chapter will be out on the 01.08 for patreons and three weeks later for the public! :)
That's great. I hope the chapter uploads are consistent and nothing wrong happens for the team. Best wishes to you all!!
Nice start, curious to see where it goes:>
Thank you for reading! :)
Incredible start! UwU good writing, fun characters, and a very, VERY intriguing story concept~ :) tell me, by any chance, were xou inspired by psychic vampyres?
Thank you for reading and I'm glad yoy liked it 😊 I don't know what psychic vampyres is though.
Ah, well, it's basically just people who feed off of psychic energy :p
It was unexpected for a demo to be able to evoke such a range of emotions in me already. Reading that blew me away. I'm glad there's more to come because I really need to see what the future holds for Lucian.
I notice there is no romance tag, is there any plan for that in the later story? I have some hopes for what might happen with certain characters, but can also see a potentially different outcome.
Thank you for reading the first chapter. I would prefer not to divulge anything and let the story speak for itself 😊 We plan on releasing a chapter every 1st of each month so stay tuned for more!
That's fair enough. I look forward to being along for the ride :D
Interesting story and I'm looking forward for more to comes, especially the 'light' thing.
Glad you like it :)
I have no idea where the "light" plot is going for but it's interesting enough to follow. Atlas is really cute too and definitely not the main motivation nope.
Well, I can't give away everything from the start, else it would be boring or? Glad you like Atlas :)
After playing it, I really liked it. It was the beginning and the end of the chapter that I felt was good and many emotions were very impressive. Keep fighting and I'll be looking forward to the next update.
May the light guide you
Thank you for your kind words :) I hope the next chapters will be enjoyable for you as well.
Version 0.6 is a fine production, but you should be aware that it drops into a loop after - I think - the encounter with Atlas. The loop encompasses the training session wit the Zebra and drops back to Atlas.
Hi there. We are aware of the issue and I believe Tito fixed it with the update. But I'll make sure to pass it on to him that some might still experience the bug. Thanks for letting us know! :)